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4th Wall

The characters in Matt Cameron's //Ruby Moon and Jane Harrison's// Stolen engage the audience with their personal concerns and Australia's cultural issues by breaking the fourth wall. This is achieved in //Stolen// as the characters walk onstage in the opening scene, talking casually and acknowledge the audience. This is shown in the stage direction (NEVER NEVER NEVER mention stage directions) 'they look out into the audience, acknowledging those they recognize' (instead you need to describe the action as though you are seeing it happen. This is where you can confirm the use of action through using workshops as evidence). By doing so, the audience instantly feels a connection with the characters and is more open to the personal concerns of the characters, as the space which is usually sustained between them and the characters (the fourth wall) is broken. Through the characters personal concerns, the audience's attention is brought to Australia's cultural issue of the mistreatment of Indigenous Australians. (this sentence is too broad and general - you need to give examples of speific scenes and moments where this is taking place and how this engages the audience) In the play //Ruby Moon//, the fourth wall is broken as Ray and Sylvie, gaze out the window and over the audience. (explain this further) This brings the audience's attention to the cultural issue of suburban paranoia. It's achieved as Ray and Sylvie's actions evoke a sense amongst the audience of being the 'bad guys' who are 'spying' on Ray and Sylvie, when the audience knows they are not. (this is an interesting point. explain your analysis of this relationship further - give some specific examples of when this happens) The breaking of the fourth wall to provoke understanding of character's personal concerns and Austraia's cultural issues is effectively used in //Ruby Moon// and //Stolen.// (the summary statement needs to include some detail of the points your have raised in this paragraph - it is more than a topic sentence)

Jasmine - You need to revise some of the content of this paragraph and include some examples.