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//Ruby moon// is a play set after the suspected kidnapping of the character Ruby Moon, who is the daughter of Ray and Sylvie Moon. The play shows the struggles of the two parents to cope with the loss of Ruby. (no new line within a paragraph) At first thought (revise use of this word) the audience is unaware of what is happening. If anything, the audience is confused and dumbfounded as the opening conversation that takes place between Ray and Sylvie makes no sense. The conversation is disjointed, where the replies to each others questions, are merely out of context to what was just asked. They are senseless replies with numerous silences placed in between the exchanging of lines. If the questions are met with a reasonable answer, the answer is said with with a fast paced banter, which only gives the only indication that the pair, Ray and Sylvie, are married. (no new line within a paragraph) Even though little information is given to these (to what?), through the dramatic techniques of s ilence and b anter as well as disjointed conversations the audience can easily agree that something has gone wrong in the lives of Ray and Sylvie and due to these techniques, which do not self explain what has been happening, the fact that Ruby Moon has been kidnapped is masked in the E pilogue (or do you mean Prologue?). Therefore, an eerie atmosphere is created using these techniques, which in affect create the dramatic form of Absurdism, which makes the play as much confusing as the interpretations that are made from the characters husband- wife talk.

Aidan, the first part of this paragraph is clear, but you lose clarity as you progress through the paragraph. Remember the structuring of the paragraph, you need to include some examples and evidence or perhaps a workshop experience after you have explained. Your topic sentence needs to be clearer - what is this paragraph discussing?? The struggles of Ray and Sylvie???? If so, this paragrpag needs a few more points and examples. Forget about the content of the dialogue and what it is //not// communicating, focus on what the techniques, stage elements and acting //are// communicating. Bonus points for being the first to start the homework! Mrs Lyons